What Is This Poem?

Whatever could this little poem be?
Some words placed down for another to see.

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-Rev. Randall R. McBride, Jr.

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Apparently my previous comment here was widely misunderstood, so I'll replace it with my 'real' thoughts.

As always, Fuzzies, this work is well-conceived and executed, with a point that is sufficiently enigmatic to make it worth searching for. Concerning the broad misinterpretation of your meaning - this was inevitable given the nature of this piece. Your previous works with more or less hidden meanings have been of significantly greater length than this, which provides you more space in which to provide clues. In all of these prior pieces, the dedicated reader should easily have been able to deduce the primary meaning. This one, however, requires careful consideration, as well as a knowledge of the event(s) on which you are commenting, in order for the principal significance to be realized.

Concerning your point - yes, too often too much emphasis is placed on length and endless verbage in poetry. As I've suggested before, one must consider his topic and his intended mode of delivery in order to achieve the most appropriate length for his work. For those (such as, admittedly, myself) who consistently lean towards longer work, I challenge you to truly consider this matter and practice employing a true economy of words. For those (lordoftoads comes to mind) who nearly exclusively lean towards shorter work, break out of your mould more often, and discover the merits of many different styles and lengths. For all, greater variance in your form and length will expand your capabilities and versatility as a writer.


"The only people for me are the mad ones, the ones who are mad to live, mad to talk, mad to be saved, desirous of everything at the same time, the ones who never yawn or say a commonplace thing, but burn, burn, burn, like fabulous roman candles exploding like spiders across the stars..." - Jack Kerouac, On the Road

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Fuzzies,

I've seen what you are capable of...which leaves me wondering why you would bother posting this? If you're that bored, write us something that we can sit back and think about...

Sorry, but I think this was too far below your potential to be considered 'poetry.'

You've got the couplet part down, but please...use this to your advantage and give us something a bit longer, a bit more thoughtful.

-Hellsangel

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I swear I'll change my ways
I just called to say I want you to come back home
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December 22, 1985-March 27, 2003
Rest in peace, mi hermanita

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couplet ['kʌplıt]
noun two successive lines of verse, usually rhymed and of the same metre
[ETYMOLOGY: 16th Century: from French, literally: a little pair; see couple]

Learn something new each day.This is whats its all about.



What lies behind us, and what lies before us are tiny matters compared to what lies within us.
~ by Ralph Waldo Emerson ~

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I posted it as a moral thing for someone who was accused of writing a poem that was too short so that she/he would not be the only one on the board with a poem considered so.
The sarcasm isn't necessary, and a tad immature,
and you're judging on face-value FAR too much.
I'm happy to let it be deleted, and laughed at.
The point is that a poem needn't be long.

I'm also impressed at just how negative people can be towards a small amount of verse.

Here's a challenge, take this tiny verse, sit back, and think.
How many metaphors does it hold, how many statements does it say.
If you can't do that with two lines then how can you expect to do it with 20?

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-Rev. Randall R. McBride, Jr.

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The point is that a poem needn't be long.

I'm also impressed at just how negative people can be towards a small amount of verse.

Here's a challenge, take this tiny verse, sit back, and think.
How many metaphors does it hold, how many statements does it say.
If you can't do that with two lines then how can you expect to do it with 20?

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You handled that well Fuzzies When I first read this, when you first posted, I wasn't quite sure what to make of it, because like others, I just thought it would be "longer." Thank you for replying to your post. I reread the poem after I read what you said above and I think that this is a very thoughtful and interesting piece. Read on its own I find it cute, but with what you wrote above, I find it kind of inspiring.

Thank you for sharing...

(Yay!)

-A Friend

"Millions of men have lived to fight, build palaces and boundaries, shape destinies and societies; but the compelling force of all times has been the force of originality and creation profoundly affecting the roots of human spirit."
-Ansel Adams

I agree with QA...at first it was a little uh, confusing we'll say. I was wondring what was the point? and then I did as you said and thought...very interesting to think about all of the many things is said in so few words. What could this poem be? I find it to be anything that our imaginations can make of it. Splendid job.

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Love,
Kate
"There's only us, there's only this, forget regret or life is yours to miss, no other road, no other way. No day but today."
Apparently I'm an angel

I've read your poem. I've read the responses. I have noticed that some people hate it, and some people love it. I am one of the ones who loves it. Its short so it can easily have many meanings. I like it, good job!

~*~Amanda~*~

Fuz:

I just "discovered" your work on this board. I like it very much. I especially like this one.

-Toad

and P.S.: Thanks for standing up to defend writers of short poems. People don't seem to realize that it's harder to write a short one than a long one.

Fuzzie, I loved this poem. I love couplets, they were the first type of poem I ever learned to write. I make them up in my head constantly, and I also think you handled the comments very well. Dont listen to unessecary negative comments, QL isnt for the future "greatest poet of all time", it's for people who love to write poems (the odd time stories) and they dont have to be masterpieces. Bravo fuzzies, I applaud you!



--Some days all you gotta do every mornin' is stand up and say "Satan, don't you be gettin' in my business today!"--

Why say in two pages what can be said so beautifully and so neatly in two lines?

I love it!

It allows the reader to really digest those two lines, and absorb every tiny morsel of meaning.

Peace

"You breathed on me and made my life a richer one to live,
When i was deep in poverty you taught me how to give."

-Bob Dylan

I think that if everything you want to say only takes up two lines - then two lines is fine. I liked the couplet. I thought it said alot - too many people write for others and not for themselves - its so sad .

~Born to Shimmer~

I used to think that I could not go on
And life was nothing but an awful song
- I believe I can fly - R. Kelly

Writing for others is just as important as writing for oneself. What is written for oneself really needn't be posted here...

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