Okay, i don't really know why i'm posting this....it's just an odd little personal piece of prose i wrote when i was feeling a little down one day...i'm afraid it's probably not very good (though i've read and re-read it too many times and can't tell anymore...) but for some reason i'm posting it anyway. Criticisms, questions, comments all welcome!
A lover does not guarantee love, we know. If you had loved me, if I had loved you, you would be here. I would not be watching this heavy yellow moon sink in the thick, sullen sky, and thinking of you. Of that first night in the dark, in the sand, when at last we found each other. Of your eyes, your arms, your back, and the secrets in your face that only I saw. Of the way you said my name, the way you carried me home, and how safe I knew I was. Of walking with you arm in arm. Of sleeping outside and talking by starlight. Of that last, frantic night when we dared not sleep, when you said you were no good with emotions, but yes, you would too. Of the way you left – a last kiss, a face in the window of a disappearing car, perhaps later a rumble in the sky and a black silhouette, heading for the blue of the sea and the land beyond. Yes, if you had loved me, I would not be remembering these things alone from my window, above the glittering lights of the city, beneath the sad sigh of the moon. And if I had loved you... But perhaps this is love. This hole, this shadow, this sad glimmer in the eye of the moon. And perhaps you too are looking and thinking and remembering, remembering our summer. Perhaps you too are wondering if I am thinking of you.
I thought this was very good. This is the kind of prose I like, the personal kind, that's like a letter to someone. It was very wistful, sad, and yearning - and poetic. Very good writing, keep posting more!
I'm speechless. Nearly crying, truth be told. But I'm half happy for you, half sad for me if you understand... ...Things have to end. I'm dealing with that right now. How to end something with someone. I may need your advice, I'll email you regarding that... This was beautiful and wonderful, this was an essence of you pouring out onto the page, and I think that is why it is so beautiful. You never fail to stun me. Neither it seems does your writing.
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