alright there is a story behind this one... it will be explained in a reply later on... hope you all enjoy... ciao

I saw her from across the pool
I sitting cool buy the cooler
She glanced over at me

Slowly she walked over to me
She reached towards me
The sweat trickled down my body

She took a hold of me
She pulled me close
I peered deep into her eyes

So pure
So blue
So innocent

Her lips
So round so full
So luscious

She reached up and pulled off my hat
A sensation ran through me
I felt bubbly

She held me closer
Put her lips around mine
I could not control myself

Between her legs I went just sitting there
Helpless in my surroundings
She pulled me back up to her

Her lips around mine
I just couldn’t control it any longer
I was empty

She looked at me once again
And there she left me
Crushed

This is my life
I live only once
I am…



A Pop Can

From the land of thinking this is

-- The Man of Logic --

[This message was edited on 01-31-03 at 10:23 PM.]

Short and sweet and... weird, I must say!

I truly was LOL and I would love to hear the story behind this-- Unique idea and great poem.

It was so realistic-- could be so easily compared to with human life and experiences.

Very good poem-- I loved it sooo much... hey, it made me laugh-- that's gotta count for something...

"I am everything inside of you that you wish you could be."

Vertical Horizon- “Everything You Want”

As a smile comes across my face,...darn,this was different.A pop can? Had me going!

I think you could sell this to Pepsi.

I sidestep the either/or choices of logic, and choose both.-unknown

but you took mr by surprise.....teehee. creative, creative poem. never would have thought about pop cans.....lol...what a world.


~Much love~


¤Imbued¤Glory¤

I think in shades of blue A haze overcoming me, Blotting out all that I knew. --"Shades of Blue" by Imbued

The first time I read this I was thinking along the same lines as Imbued. The second time I read this(knowing the subject matter) I STILL thought along those same lines. This is very very clever!
You have taken something as simple as a soda (or pop, as we say in Michigan) can and made it something new to think of. Makes me want to take the 'Pepsi challenge' now!

Wonderfully talented poetry! PJ

I'd rather learn from one bird how to sing than to teach ten thousand stars how not to dance - e e cummings

I am laughing my *** off right now. That was what's the word i'm looking for ... umm surprising. Definently not what I expected.

Nice One,

~Mickey~

OOOoohhh!! See down south the only thing we call soft drinks are coke! No matter what brand or flavor it's all coke, funny actually. Just like your little poem! Good job, had me smiling!

From the desk of THE COLD POET

A man said to the Universe:
"Sir, I exist!"
"However," replied the Universe,
"The fact has not created in me a sense of obligation!."

OUT-STANDING WORK, I love a suprise ending. Thanks for sharing it.

teehee.... Not what I was expecting! Never know what's gonna happen when you press that 'next' button baby! Very cute- keep on writing!!!!!

-A friend

*Precise Imagination*

We want to stand upon our own feet and look fair and square at the world - its good facts, its bad facts, its beauties, and its ugliness; see the world as it is and be not afraid of it. Conquer the world by intelligence and not merely by being slavishly subdued by the terror that comes from it. -Bertrand Russell, Why I Am Not A Christian

Now thats the way to grab your readers and bring them in for the "thrill" or is that just plain skill? As the others before me said, LMAO...Thanks for the great giggle..I needed that one tonight.Gem



"A pity about the people! they are brave enough comrades, but they have heads like soapboiler's.-Schiller- Wallenstien's Lager. XI. 347

A definite smile was brought to my face from this. As others have said what a unique idea! Brilliant perspective!

"I will dare to do just what I do. Be just what I am. And dance whenever I want to." -Sabrina Ward Harrison

as I'm sure the soda was!
You had me going, and got a smile outta me already this morning. Great one.

"Getting ahead in a difficult profession requires avid faith in yourself.
That is why some people with mediocre talent, but with great
inner drive,go much further than people with vastly superior talent."
~ Sophia Loren ~

manoflogic- lol very nicely written, had me going all the way there, an enjoyable, refreshing read, keep writing and I'll keep smiling.

best wishes,
~Hope~

Mike,
You're a bad influence on me!!! lol but then again in this house you can't imagine what these people talk about...anyways, I loved it! and you're work is never bad! How do yo do it? lol everyone even agrees with me! See now you cant say you're bad...lol...Keep them coming!! I love your work and don't forget it!

~*~*Mandie*~*~

"I'm dying inside and nobody knows it but me..."

First popcorn, now soda? You're making me hungry. You've got a knack for personification. I still remember being horrified at first by your popcorn poem - I thought that poor thing was a person, being all tortured like that. Well...yum.

belesprit

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May all the maidens out there continue to wait with hearts of hope and may all the knights out there remember the love once found in the sunset.
C 2002 VoiceOfTheStars
Don't Click Here.

LOL. Very nicely done. I didn't expect the ending, good job.

-Hellsangel

I loved this! You had me going there for a while.... Then, the twist at the end almost confused me! But, it all made sense when I read it back over Thanks for sharing.

xox*megan*xox

"The Greeks didn't have obituaries.
When a man died, they asked only one question:
'Did he have passion?'"
~Serendipity

Extremly nice job in pulling the reader in, with the descriptive words and the 'original thought' only to be fooled that it is not what it seems! Very clever, a nice original idea! Truly original, and humourous! Keep up the good work, and good luck! :-D ;-) :P

"Don't walk behind me; I may not lead. Don't walk in front of me; I may not follow. Just walk beside me and be my friend." -Albert Camus

*bump*

Such a good one!!

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This wall I was many a weary month in finishing, and yet never thought myself safe till it was done.
Dafoe, Robinson Crusoe
You cannot run away from a weakness. You must sometimes fight it out or perish; and if that be so, why not now, and where you stand?
Robert Louis Stevenson
Belesprit's Blog.

Oh My... after I read this I started laughing so hard. Then I got my cousin to come to the computer so she could read it. This is one of my favorite things I have read ever on this board. It was absolutely brilliant...just brilliant. Going to find the popcorn one right now.