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[This message was edited by Fuzzies on 12-10-04 at 01:17 PM.]

I did not find these works "teenage-ish" at all...rather, I found them quite mature and deeply expressive of your feelings at that time.

I must admit you had this old woman stumped with the word oleginous ( and YES retardomontalban, I am VERY well read) My dictionary did not have it so it must be misspelled...oleaginous is probably the word you intended...which means moldable and therefore very applicable.

Again, great job and I hope now you are past that dark mood... thanks for sharing.

"There is no disguise which can hide love for long where it exists, or simulate it where it does not" La Rochefoucauld

But I am still gonna define the new word.

Main Entry: ole·ag·i·nous
Pronunciation: "O-lE-'a-j&-n&s
Function: adjective
Etymology: Middle English, from Middle French oleagineux, from Latin oleagineus of an olive tree, from olea olive tree, from Greek elaia
Date: 15th century
1 : resembling or having the properties of oil : OILY; also : containing or producing oil
2 : marked by an offensively ingratiating manner or quality
- ole·ag·i·nous·ly adverb
- ole·ag·i·nous·ness noun

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Unless of course NZ spells it differently. In which case it wouldn't be wrong. Other than that, I thought these seemed pretty thoughtful. Thanks for sharing.

P.S. What about nuage? It's not in my dictionary. Maybe I should get a new one.

Harv

Hold fast to dreams
For if dreams die
Life is a broken-winged bird
That cannot fly.

Hold fast to dreams
For when dreams go
Life is a barren field
Frozen with snow
-Langston Hughes, Dreams

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its a good thing i got here after Harv.. i was pondering over the meaning of the O-word too!

the three of these are painfully written... but i'm glad you exchanged ur knife for a pen - you've brought out emotions i dont think many would be able to speak of, although they may be in the same situation.. thank you for sharing!

P.S - what is nuage anyway?


--------Sanya----------

“Do what you think and say what you feel because those who mind don't matter, and those who matter don't mind.”-Richard Bach

The moving finger writes
And having writ, moves on
Not all thy piety nor wit
Shall lure it back to cancel half a line
Nor all thy tears wash out a word of it.

Fuzziesareourfriends...

The explanatory "forward" is most helpful. Thanks.

Adolescence...is truly that, just as you've portrayed it. Only difference, the pupa in the cocoon is much easier to deal with on a daily basis while waiting for the butterfly to emerge.


Lost and Found...When emotion felt becomes emotion transferred (to the reader) that is success! I am reminded of a poem I once wrote years ago about a young son who was putting me through a rough time. I didn't contemplate "The Great Exit"...but I was fearful he would.

Nuage...Hmmm. my dictionary doesn't carry it either. Perhaps a "Fuzzies" word?

Good writing style. Good word usuage.

Limn

Hehe, yeah, i mispelt 'oleaginous', it must have been just general idiocy on my part. And now to unveal the mysterious word 'nuage'.
Sorry, it's French, that might have confused you; it means 'cloud', it should be 'le nuage', but i didn't like the feel of it like that. I'm afraid i mix French and English into a kind of Frenglais a lot of the time in my poetry, i often find i have a French word which is more precise or flowing, (Such as 'aussi' which is also).
Cheers!
Fuzzies!

Harv's dictionaries come in handy even after approx. two years (Oct 8 and 9 - coincidence )!

Adolescence:
Sheesh, I don't recall connecting adolescence with pupae and evolution, though the concepts now seem so "there". And I think "oleginous" is a good word to describe a side of me ! What's "aussi"? Merci, if you explain . "a minor Darwinism", cute. You managed to put across the core of adolescence: change.

Lost and Found:
One of my favourites by you, that I'd remember.
Rain, tears and blood...
"one way trip" aw I dislike the sense of inevitability and fear the inevitability these lines express.
'build weight', 'envelops'; 'nothingness', 'numbly'; 'filters down'-'spills'-'runs down'-'drums out'-'flows freely' -- I get the impression of feeling burdened and asphyxiated, numbed, and then falling down down down... something true of someone sitting with a knife in hand... I hope whoever wishes for a knife finds a pen nearby... or a copy of your poem.

Nuage:
Hey little cloud
Are you lonely man?
-Cute lines!!
"Wind prevail, don't they..."
do you imply, winds prevail?
"But don't you wish you knew it..."
-knew that 'Life's a bitch', you imply, correct?
I don't recall imagining clouds as lonely, albeit I have thought so regarding the sun. Perhaps loneliness and love permeate every being.
I feel by this time you have found your "cloud crowd", may life offer you playmates that take away a bit of your void.

Like Limn, I also found your foreward useful and interesting (D_W would be impressed , he recommends authors' brief elucidiations ). Your writing has become more 'considered' now, however it was commendable even two years ago. My teenage-ish poems would seem infantile if we compare . Keep sharing! Oh and P.S.: YAY!

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"My mother and father desired a child and they begot me.
And I wanted a mother and a father and I begot night and the sea."
-Kahlil Gibran, "Sand and foam"

[This message was edited by LetswriteNshare on 10-08-04 at 09:42 AM.]

I really didnt find these works teenageish problems maybe if you changed the words around a little. But anyway it was good just needs a little work.

~sunshine~