GOD DID NOT CREATE MAN FIRST AS,MOST BELIEVE: HE CREATED WOMAN;
AND FROM HER SMILE WHICH ,
BURNED BRIGHTER IN HIS HEART
THAN A THOUSAND SUNS ,
FORMED THE HEAVENS AND EARTH; - IN HER HONOR.
AND THEN ,FOR EVERY ONE OF THESE GLORIOUS CREATURES,
HE CREATED A STAR-
AS INDIVIDUAL AND MAGNIFICENT AS THEIR NAMESAKE;
SO THAT MAN HE THEN CREATED,MIGHT GAZE UPON THEM IN AWE AND WONDER.
ESPECIALLY THE ONE NAMED JODIE;YOU SHALL LIVE ON FOREVER.
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Hi. Welcome to Quoteland.
I don't think your piece could be called innappropriate. It's heartfelt and simply beautiful. I especially like the line " ... her smile which, burned brighter in his heart than a thousand suns".

Some comments:
Is there a reason for the capitals? I think that lower case would be easier to read, and better suited to the poem's quiet, contemplative nature.
A couple of commas are in the wrong spot.
In the fifth line, I think you probably don't need the semi-colon or the dash, and definately not both.
In the eighth line you switched mid sentence from singular (He created A star) to plural (THEIR namesake).
In the last line, I don't think the word "you" quite fits. As the poem as a whole seems to be adressed to the world in general rather than to Jodie, it could be better to say "she will live on forever".

Here's a slightly altered version.
God did not create man first, as most believe:
He created woman; and from her smile,
Which burned brighter in His heart than a thousand suns,
Formed the heavens and the earth in her honour.

And then, for every one of these glorious creatures,
He created a star as individual and magnificent as it's namesake;
So that the men He then created might gaze upon them in awe and wonder.
Especially the one named Jodie – she shall live on forever.

You don't need to use any of these suggestions if they don't feel right. Once again, welcome. You'll like it here.

Rala;thank you for your critique;as for punctuation and such,i am obviously no literary scholor;i do however understand your corrections however,at this time i will let it stand on it's own merit:you see,never have i written such things in my life;i am very proud of this piece not just for myself but,for the one who drew these words from my heart who,never knew she had done so.thank youagain,Rala!