I wrote the grandest fairy tale-- a story to behold! There was a man, born to fail, (or so the story's told). They fell in love (the sweetest jail, though often very cold.) Tis a story of betrayal! How? He died of old.
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I wrote a love story. You've heard of it before. There was a couple rich in love. Together they sought more. One day, the boy ran away towards Heaven's open door, and the girl was left to face a day-- lonely, sad, and poor.
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I scribed a great opera, though only in my head. When I tried to write it down, I wrote my thoughts instead. Without the music, pomp, and dance, that seem real in dreams and bed, the story is quite simple: "I loved him, but he's dead."
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I wrote a little ditty, an epic one in fact, but the bustle of the city made me write it very fast. I cut it down to nitty gritty, and finished it at last: "I loved him but he died without me."
And that's that.
-------------------------------- (Also titled, "Fair_Gwen Should Not be Allowed to Read the Sad Articles in her Local Paper.")
As always ... very creative, fresh and unique. I like the way your mind works. You as a writer differentiate yourself from other writers by the way you see the world. Some of the stuff you wrote are not even that special but your view of it made it absolutely cool. May be it's because I love to write cliche things so much ... I find yours even more spectacular.
"Nunc Scio Quit Sit Amor" But it's still not premarital sex if you don't plan on getting married
Fair, I felt the deep sadness in your stanzas as one who’s enduring a never-ending pain. The last line, (And that’s that) cannot hide a troubled heart for death is final only for the dead.
Jack
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it's amazing how the things we read can trigger such powerful emotions - and how you can write them so "simply" but profoundly that they can touch us but be so universally understood.
Always a pleasure to see your name when i'm "lurking"
-jess
_________________________________________________ I found your picture today I swear I'll change my ways I just called to say I want you to come back home I just called to say, I love you come back home (Sheryl Crow and Kid Rock)
Stella Splendens December 22, 1985-March 27, 2003 Rest in peace, mi hermanita
brilliant...well written and a rhyme scheme to die for
Rico Gavin Gabrielle/ Julian Alexander May 11. 2003- June 3, 2003 Gavin Gabrielle Knox (Reborn) March 21, 2004 Raw, gutsy, and in-your-face. are words that have been used. To me they describe exactly what Rico is all about. Don't ever change………comments from Songbird in the poem “ Walking Through Hell” Rico-style Unmatched - unsurpassed......Rhon831 from the poem "My Fruit" :breathless: ...... Concerned Brotha from the poem "Formality" When you see the name 'Rico' - you think of Poetry Knockout from the poem "My Fruit" MLK Jr. meets Kanye Gamzplayer from '' a Safe Poem"
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