RAGS TO RICHNESS

You stand before me in your nakedness
Your written words have stripped away
The shredded garments of your shattered heart

My eyes behold the rounded cliches of your life
The belly of your hidden suffering
And penetrate the poignant poetry of your pain

Can no one hear, or care
To heed your crying eyes
And tears that disinfect your weeping wounds

Can no one see, but me
The heaven that you offer
Proffer with pleading eyes and bleeding heart

No sacrifice would be too great to make
To honour such an offer
But no sacrifice would ever need be made

Just the tender touch of healing hands
The armour of encircling arms
Will surely serve to soothe your suffering

Clothed in the multi-hued mantle of understanding
A silken sarong of sanity
You'll stand no more in nakedness before me

You'll drink from golden goblet
Flowing o'er with lavished love
And your written words will soon reflect a happy heart

With those ravages redressed
In the richness of rose-red robes
You'll revel in the rapture of regeneration

My eyes will then enjoy your rounded curves of comfort
Your belly laughs of happiness
And behold the very beauty of your being.

WW

quote:

My eyes will then enjoy your rounded curves of comfort
Your belly laughs of happiness
And behold the very beauty of your being.

I loved this WW.

Nice job as always.



NW

For this, I must use my highest word of praise: "Exquisite"! This is the most beautiful piece of poetry I have read in a long time. I can say no more...it has left me speechless. ~~lb~~

quote:

Just the tender touch of healing hands
The armour of encircling arms
Will surely serve to soothe your suffering

This is the section I like, the entire poem is a work of art, I love it.

The section I've quoted reminds me of something very dear to my heart. When someone is suffering, either physically or mentally, the one thing that wraps them up, as if in a security blanket, is the gentle touch or cuddle of someone close to them. This means more than you may realize, and for those few seconds or minutes, the pain can be lessened.

Beautifully done WW.

absolutely magnificent.ww truly beautiful.
dsk

Dear WW,
I love the emotion of this poem, the need to help is so well expressed. I would suggest that you consider eliminating adjectives when not really needed and some verbiage. Example and suggestions for your consideration given below.

Before me in your nakedness
Written words strip away
Garments of your shattered heart

Delete rounded in line 1 stanza 2.
Delete weeping in line 3 stanza 3.
Delete proffer in line 3 stanza 4.
Delete to make line 1 stanza 5.
Delete But and would ever in line 3 stanza 5.
Delete tender in line 1 of stanza 6.
Delete mantle of in line 1 stanza 7.
Delete before me in line 3 stanza 7.
Delete And your in line 3 stanza 8.
Delete those in line 1 stanza 9.
Delete the in line 2 stanza 9.
Delete rounded in line 1 stanza 10.

WW

I love this poem.
Very beautiful as it is.

Sorry Harry, I beg to disagree.


~NW

Wow! I'm truly overwhelmed by all your wonderful comments.

I shall treasure that word, LB - 'exquisite' - I like it!

And HT, thank you for taking the time to make suggestions for improvement. I'm all for cutting excess wording usually, but in this piece I wanted the emotion to bubble and gush, to overflow.

Thank you so much, to all of you.

WW

Wow....speechless not even Mona Lisa could
Out shine this work of art.no changes
Needed